Haiku: A Cloud
The sun is going down. There is not a cloud in the sky. The leaves on the hedge next door glistens in the burst of the day’s last rays. This is a quiet street. The hibiscus has several buds almost ready to flower. If we have a frost tonight they may be damaged.
a cloud
glistens
frost damaged buds
Benita Kape © 19.4.2018
I have followed the prompt for today. Looked for a minimal response. Moved the word buds two places forward. Not seen this done with erasure poems. But then I decided to write the haiku backwards
buds damaged
frost glistens
a cloud
BK ©
Is there a third way I might do this? I don’t think so.
Our (optional) prompt for the day takes it cue from Brady’s suggestion that erasure/word banks can allow for compelling repetitive effects. Today we challenge you to write a paragraph that briefly recounts a story, describes the scene outside your window, or even gives directions from your house to the grocery store. Now try erasing words from this paragraph to create a poem or, alternatively, use the words of your paragraph to build a new poem.
benitakape 
Wasn’t sure how to approach this one and you have inspired me. Thanks Benita! 🙂
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You are welcome
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I never thought of doing a haibun for this one, and yours is the second I’ve seen. It works really well, gives a coherence, I think. I like the backward haiku better, I think.
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Yes, the backward one is my preference.
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