City with Fireworks – NaPoWriMo 2016 – Day 14 (2) – san san Chinese poem

City with Fireworks

From a vantage point over the city.
Across the city fireworks light up the night sky,
Buildings, parks, schools lit up in a city alive.
Alive in a city, the dark lanes that scarify.
Down to the city fireworks fast tentacles dive,
And what was hidden is hidden again.
And what, the city streets, will now occupy?
Below the city, centuries with stars overlain.

Benita H. Kape © 14.4.2016

My second go at this again today. A little happier with this san san

Today’s prompt comes to us from TJ Kearney, who invites us to try a seven-line poem called a san san, which means “three three” in Chinese (It’s also a term of art in the game Go). The san san has some things in common with the tritina, including repetition and rhyme. In particular, the san san repeats, three times, each of three terms or images. The seven lines rhyme in the pattern a-b-c-a-b-d-c-d.


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